2009年6月英語四級考前熱點高分范文(三)

　　Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a composition on the topic A Food Poisoning Accident. You should write at least 120 words, and base your composition on the outline (given in Chinese) below:

　　你的幾個同學(xué)因食用了從某超市買回的食品而中毒，幸虧及時治療而脫險。請描述他(們)中毒與脫險的過程，并呼吁要加強食品安全。

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　　行文思路

　　本題屬于情景式命題。提綱要求描述一件事情的經(jīng)過，由此可判斷本文應(yīng)為記敘文。

　　根據(jù)所給提綱，本文應(yīng)包含如下內(nèi)容：交待食物中毒的背景和原因;敘述中毒的和脫險的經(jīng)過;談?wù)動纱艘�發(fā)的感想，呼吁加強食品安全。

　　高分范文

　　A Food Poisoning Accident

　　Last month, I [1]witnessed a food poisoning accident [2]happening to my classmates. At that time the situation was really very dangerous and urgent. Though finally they got out of danger, this accident [3]is still vivid in my mind.

　　That day was Julie’s birthday, one of my classmates. In order to celebrate it, her roommates bought a big birthday cake for her from a supermarket nearby. They shared the cake happily. [4]However, after a while, all of them felt abdominal pain, nausea and dizziness. Two of them even cannot stand up because of great pain. We [5]rushed to send them to the hospital. [6]It turned out that the cake they ate had expired its guarantee period. Futunately, [7]due to timely treatment, they all recovered very soon.

　　[4]However, this accident [8]leaves me a deep ponder. I think it is very urgent to take effective measures to improve food safety. [4]Firstly, the government should [9]strengthen supervision and administration on food safety. [4]More importantly, to those who immoral businessmen, more strict punishment should be given. [4]Besides, we consumers should be more careful in buying food. [10]Only in this way can we make sure that no same accident happens.

　　【亮點點評】

　　[1]“目睹，目擊”。

　　[2]“發(fā)生在某人身上”，現(xiàn)在分詞短語作定語。

　　[3]“仍然令我記憶猶新”。

　　[4]過渡銜接詞語，使文章條理清晰、銜接緊密。

　　[5]“聞訊趕來”。

　　[6]“結(jié)果是，原來是”。